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三十九号作品：土豆娃娃 What is the connotation of the Olympic Spirit? Being the culture distinguished-(有这个词吗?)gathering and cultural heritage of all humankind, its splendid connotation and the(the可以省略) importance are playing an(a)more and more important part in human life. The Olympic can be an attitude towards life. Its spirits emphasize that humankind can possess healthy body as well as soul,(人类可以追求心灵?) optimistic inspirit, the enthusiasm and pursuing about life by self-training and self-participation. The Olympic can be a modern ethic with the harmonious, free, healthy and zealous characteristics. The lifestyle(of) Olympic spirit wants to build up is on the basic(on the basic? Or on the basis) of experiencing the pleasure in the struggle, excellent model education value(看不懂哈?) and the basic canonizing about the ethics. The Olympic movement is considered as the common heritage of human civilization, the following items(个人觉得这个词语不好) such as exciting tournaments, training for the volunteers, establishment of the venue(不懂啊,venue建立?s) , concept of city design and plan, highlight of art performances, broadcasting and watching absout games covered the whole world, all these can become the precious and vsaluable Olympic heritage. Today, Olympic (spirit) has become a common desire, a common expectation and a common wish to the mankind of the whole world. The lapse(?) of year will add more and more abundant new connotation to become the innovating and increasing precious mental culture heritage of the mankind. 点评: 词语表达不太到位,看下来不顺畅,建议取词和结构上多考虑下. 评分:79 四十号作品：游泳的水草 What is the deep meaning of Olympic spirit?（deep meaning过于强求） It will become the cultural pageant and civilized(文化的?文明的?s) heritage of human being. Its rich meaning and importance for our life is growing day by day. Olympic is a kind of attitude of life. Through exercising ourselves and joining ourselves in society, and then we will have healthy physique, optimistic spirit, passion and going in for wonderful life is what Olympic spirit wants to emphasize.(我找不到主语啊.) Olympic is a kind of concordant, free, healthy, active and modern moral thought. The life style that Olympic-ism wants to establish is based on the delight that can get from fighting, educational value of outstanding example and basal confirmation for common moral thought. Olympic sports（sport） is a kind of common heritage for civilization of human being. Impassioned and exciting match, training for Young Volunteers, constructing(construction) the gymnasiums, the design of city layout, the wonderful performance, and the matches(前面是单数,后面又是复数,建议保持一致 ) will be televised and watched by the people all over the world. All of them will be the value Olympic heritage. Recently, Olympic has already become a kind of common dream, common expectation, and common desire for all of us. As time goes by, it will enrich and increase new deep meaning ceaselessly. And it will innovate and increase ceaselessly and become the value spiritual and cultural heritage of mankind. 点评：翻译就是看关键词组,这点很重要，词语需要在斟酌.长句表达时候要把握住主谓语. 评分:77 四十一号作品：ziyiqss What's the meaning of Olympic games spirit? It has become all human's cultural pageant and civililization legacy. Its rich connotation and the importance to human life are growing day by day.The Olympic is a sort of attitude to life. It insists that we chase(是不是可以用pursue比较好) the health, optimism, happy life by self-excercising(exercising) and self-participation in the games .The Olympic is a positive current ethic of harmony, freedom, health. The life style to be established is based on the joy and the educational value of excellent model in the games as well as the usual(普通的?这个词语是不是可以换一个) thory(theory) .The Olympic is the common heritage of huaman(human) civilization. they all have become precious legacy including the exciting match, the training of young volunteers, the building of gym, the design of city, the excellent art peforrmance and the world wide match living(是想说alive?) and viewing .Today ,the Olympic has become all humen's(似乎没有这种写法应为human’s) common desiration(desire) ,wish and expectation. Its increasing connation has become precious spiritual legacy for human to create consistently. 点评：基本结构上还是可以的，但语法与词汇上存在的错误还是蛮多的，注意拼写，继续努力. 评分:73 四十二号作品：快乐译族 What is the content(合适吗,这个词语) of Olympic Spirit? It has become a cultural galaxy(cultural pageant会比较好) and civilization heritage of all mankind. There is an ever increasing growth in its content diversity and its influence on human life.The Olympic Spirit is a kind of attitude towards life, emphasizing self-exercise and self-participation to let everyone enjoy a sound body 、an optimistic view and a relentless(relentless用在这里不太适合) love and pursuit of wonderful life.The Olympic Spirit is a kind of harmonious、free 、sound and active modern ethic. The way of life Ollympic（Olympic） Spirit calls for is built on the basis of the joy from struggle 、civilizing influene(influence) of good example and the basic admiration of general ethics. The Olympic events is the common heritage of human civilization, covering exciting games 、the training of young volunteers、the construction of Olympic venues、the idea of urban planning、the brilliant artistic performances and global coverage of the race broadcast and watch. Today ,the Olympic Spirit has become a common aspiration、expectation、and wish of all humanity(all human or human). It diversifies with its increasing new content as the time passes and has become human’s valuable spiritual heritage which is being increasingly innovated. 点评：觉得句子的组织还是可以的，有的用词还需要改进，语法基本没太大问题可见功底还是相当不错的。 评分：79分 四十三号作品：了安 what's the meanning(meaning) of the Olympic Spirit? It has became the Cultural Festival an civilization heritage of human, it’s rich connotations are daily on the increase as well as it's importance to human life. As time goes by,it has being constantly enriched and added new meanings, it has proved to be constantly created and accumulated precious spiritual heritage of all human. 点评：注意专业名词首字的大写Olympic，注意大小写,注意拼写,注意词性. 评分：75分 四十四号作品：sunflower0518 What does Olympic Spirit stands for? It has been a cultrual(cultural) pageant and civilization heritage for all mankind. Its rich connotation and its importance for human life are growing day by day. 点评：整篇过于僵硬如再灵活点就好，建议注意取词和句子的结构。 点评:77 最后由 leo520 于 2008-08-11 08:16:30编辑 |
Just do it!
Trust no Future, however pleasant
Let the dead past bury its dead!
Act, act in the living present!
Heart within, and God overhead!
If you fail, let it be!
Just try again until you made it!
别信任未来，无论未来的憧憬多么可爱！
让死亡的过去永远埋葬
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