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Comments:The first part of article is beautiful and fresh. My feeling in the latter part is sincere.I don't like to write for writing and you did a good job.But next time please note that in the sentence to avoid the recurrence of same vocabulary.For example, I found ICIBA today, I registered today.In one sentence has double 'today'with some inappropriate.Generally speaking, this article is very good.
点评:文章的前一部分优美,清新.后一部分感情真挚.我喜欢不是为了写作而写的感觉,这一点你做的很好.但是请注意下次避免一句话中重复出现同一个词汇.例如:I found ICIBA today, I registered today.一句中出现了两回today.总的来说，这篇文章还是很不错的．
最后由 Honey 前辈 于 2007-12-16 15:47:15编辑 |
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