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is this yardman WAN of Tianma Vehicle Company please?
yeh, who are you please?
this is guide XX of XX Travel Agency, could i know if you have arranged the vehicel of our Group DF--020712  tomorrow?
i have arranged it, JinLong 33 seats, the driver is XX
yardman Wan, which we preconcerted is 45 seats, 33 seats isn't enough!
it's midseason of travel, vehicle is shorter, if it is possible to add a 17seats bus?
our group is a whole group, people hope together in their trip,any more,if adding another ,it needs to add a guide ,it is really difficult to do so, please readjust it as possible.
well, i'll set my wits to arrange a 45 seats(i'll take measures to arrange a 45 seats)
would you please tell me who is the driver?
i don't know at that moment, just by readjusting, could you call again in the afternoon?
well, i'll contact you in the afternoon
not sure, just for you reference
最后由 懒主妇 于 2008-03-27 17:52:11编辑

好容易才鼓足勇气写的,溟生你们帮忙找找错,或有更好的说法,写出来
最后由 懒主妇 于 2008-03-27 17:55:33编辑

1. is this yardman WAN of Tianma Vehicle Company please?  Here it should be " that"

2.yeh, who are you please? Here it should be "who is that".
3.yardman Wan, which we preconcerted is 45 seats. Here it should be"what we preconcerted"
4.if it is possible to add a 17seats bus? Here "if" is unwanted and the sentence should be " is it possible to..."
5.people hope together in their trip. This sentence is Chinglish and you can say" People hope they can stay together in their trip"
6.please readjust it as possible. What does " as possible" mean?
7.would you please tell me who is the driver? Here you should say" .....tell me who the driver is?"
8.not sure, just for you reference. Does this sentence show the meaning of "好，我下午再与您联络"?
9.i don't know at that moment, just by readjusting, could you call again in the afternoon? Here "at this moment" is better and " call me again" is better and " just by readjusting" can show the meaning of "等调整过后"?

8.not sure, just for you reference. Does this sentence show the meaning of "好，我下午再与您联络"? 不肯定(对),谨供参考
9. " just by readjusting" can show the meaning of "等调整过后"?i think so, is that right?

is this yardman WAN of Tianma Vehicle Company please?
yeh, who are you please?（电话里头用Who is this? Who is that?跟前一句子对应，注意礼貌）
this is guide XX of XX Travel Agency, could i know （可以改成May I ask）if you have arranged the vehicel of our Group DF--020712  tomorrow?
yes, i have （arranged it可省）, JinLong 33 seats, the driver is XX
yardman Wan, which we preconcerted is 45 seats, 33 seats isn't enough!（We have ordered a car of 45 seats. 33 seats' will not be enough!）
it's midseason (a high season)of traveling, vehicle is shorter(vehicles are in shortage), if it is(Is it) possible to add a 17seats bus?
our group is a whole group, people hope together in their trip,any more,if adding another ,it needs to add a guide ,it is really difficult to do so, please readjust it as possible.(We are in a team. My teamates would like to stay together on the trip. What's more, we have to ask for another guide if you send one more bus. It's a difficult situation. So please find another way to help us.)
well, i'll set my wits to arrange a 45 seats(i'll take measures to arrange a 45 seats)I will do my best to get you a 45 seats'.
would you please tell me who is the driver?(who the driver is)
i don't know at that moment, just by readjusting, could you call again in the afternoon?(sorry, I have no idea right now before the arrangement. )
well, i'll contact you in the afternoon
not sure, just for you reference
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