主题：【C-E 翻译之星】郭沫若《路畔的蔷薇》

中译英我太弱。但是还玩一次吧。万事总有个开头吧。
When I was on my way to woods early this morning, I found a bunch of dumped roses right beside a trial.
The color of flower is fresh: One rose is purple, one is baby pink, and one is yellowish ivory with some bloodish.
I picked them up and holded them tight.
The tiny dewdrops on the fresh green leaves tell me they has been here for a whole night.
Was there a poor yong girl cheated by a playboy or a bad lucky yong guy was played by a frivolous woman?
Sweet small talking last night but ended up with chilly clear dewdrops this morning.
I carried her home with me and tried to find a vase to keep her.
No luck with a vase but found a broken neck wine bottle from the corner of my house.
Oh, roses, I will not give you sweet wine but I'll offer you with clear spring and same clear cleaning heart as well.
You may feel  humble and lonely in the broken bottle, but it will be much better than trampled by the roadside.
最后由 purplecold 于 2009-05-27 11:21:19编辑

哈哈 多繁茂啊 我是让大家见识见识美丽滴蔷薇啊

为什么每次都是诗词的翻译~~ 这样很有压力的~~ 翻不好感觉是对原作的不尊重呢~~

路畔的蔷薇
Roses Beside The Alley
清晨往松林里去散步，我在林荫路畔发现了一束被人遗弃了的蔷薇。蔷薇的花色还是鲜艳的，一朵紫红，一朵嫩红，一杂是病黄的象牙色中带着几分血晕。我把蔷薇拾在手里了。　　青翠的叶上已经凝集着细密的露珠，这显然是昨夜被人遗弃了的。

Waking in the pine grove one day morning, I came across a bunch of roses abandoned beside the alley. They still took on bright colors, one of which was fuchsia，another was ruddy and the last was ivory with a little bloody red.
I picked them up and found their green leaves still carrying dense dewdrops. It was obvious that they had been abandoned just last night.

这是可怜的少女受了薄幸的男子的欺绐？还是不幸的青年受了轻狂的妇人的玩弄呢？ 昨晚上甜蜜的私语，今朝的冷清的露珠……

Were they ravaged by a fickle man or cheated by a flighty woman? Yesterday's sweet words finally turned to be today’s dewdrops.


我把蔷薇拿到家里来了，我想找个花瓶来供养她。花瓶我没有，我在一只墙角上寻着了一个断了颈子的盛酒的土瓶。

I took them home and intended to find a vase to shelter them. Unfortunately, I failed to find any vase. Instead a non-neck bottle at corner once carrying wine took vase's position.

——蔷薇哟，我虽然不能供养你以春酒，但我要供养你以清洁流泉，清洁的素心。

你在这破土瓶中虽然不免要凄凄寂寂地飘零，但比遗弃在路旁被人践踏了的好罢？

My roses: though I can't irrigate you with spring wine, I would water you with clear flowing spring under my devout heart. Although you can't avoid fading lonely in this bottle, is it better than being trampled in the wild ?  

　　
最后由 rochen 于 2009-05-27 13:28:10编辑

没错，万事开头难，但good beginning is half done.
加油！

版主怎么可以以大欺小～:-(  我说诗歌确实笼统了～乍看之下像散文诗，所以就说成诗了～　

清晨往松林里去散步，我在林荫路畔发现了一束被人遗弃了的蔷薇。
Walking to the pine woods in the morning,  I found  a  bound of given-up roses on the side of avenue.
蔷薇的花色还是鲜艳的，一朵紫红，一朵嫩红，一杂是病黄的象牙色中带着几分血晕。
They were still in bright color. One was in mauve, one was in light red, others were in ill ivory with little bloody.
我把蔷薇拾在手里了。青翠的叶上已经凝集着细密的露珠，这显然是昨夜被人遗弃了的。
I picked them up. From the dense dew gathered on the verdant leaves, it showed obviously that they were abandoned last night.

这是可怜的少女受了薄幸的男子的欺绐？还是不幸的青年受了轻狂的妇人的玩弄呢？ 昨晚上甜蜜的私语，今朝的冷清的露珠……
Was this showed a poor girl was cheated by a playboy or a unlucky lad was played by a haughty vrouw? Sweety wishpers in last night were turned to be cold dewdrops in this morning.

我把蔷薇拿到家里来了，我想找个花瓶来供养她。花瓶我没有，我在一只墙角上寻着了一个断了颈子的盛酒的土瓶。
I took them home and want to provide a vase for them.But I failed. Instead of it was a non-necked wine bottle at the corner of the wall.
——蔷薇哟，我虽然不能供养你以春酒，但我要供养你以清洁流泉，清洁的素心。
Ah, roses, although I can't irrigate you spring wine, I could provide you my pure heart and clear flowing spring water.

你在这破土瓶中虽然不免要凄凄寂寂地飘零，但比遗弃在路旁被人践踏了的好罢？
Stay in the broken bottle would be lonely, but wouldn't it be better than being trod on the wild?

路畔的蔷薇
Roses at the roadside
清晨往松林里去散步，我在林荫路畔发现了一束被人遗弃了的蔷薇。蔷薇的花色还是鲜艳的，一朵紫红，一朵嫩红，一杂是病黄的象牙色中带着几分血晕。我把蔷薇拾在手里了。　　青翠的叶上已经凝集着细密的露珠，这显然是昨夜被人遗弃了的。

Walking through the pine woods one morning, I came across a bunch of roses tossed away at the roadside. Still fresh and firm, one was purple-red，another was baby red and still another was ivory pale tinted with  some blood shades.
I stooped and picked them up and found quite dense tiny dewdrops covering the verdant leaves still. It was obvious that they had just been abandoned the night before.

这是可怜的少女受了薄幸的男子的欺绐？还是不幸的青年受了轻狂的妇人的玩弄呢？ 昨晚上甜蜜的私语，今朝的冷清的露珠……

Whether were the poor girls philandered by a playboy, or some young men fooled by a flimsy woman? Last night's warm and sweet words, today’s cold and deserted dewdrops.


我把蔷薇拿到家里来了，我想找个花瓶来供养她。花瓶我没有，我在一只墙角上寻着了一个断了颈子的盛酒的土瓶。

Getting home I meant to find them a vase for good nursing care .Since I had no vase of any sort, a neck-broken wine bottle in the corner  became my choice of no choice.

——蔷薇哟，我虽然不能供养你以春酒，但我要供养你以清洁流泉，清洁的素心。

你在这破土瓶中虽然不免要凄凄寂寂地飘零，但比遗弃在路旁被人践踏了的好罢？

Alas roses, though I couldn't offer  you spring wine, I would put you in clear and clean spring water cherished with my pour soul. Better standing lonely fading away in the shabby bottle than being trampled into the mud and forgotten by one and all.  

呵呵 就是要大家互相学习 取长补短 共同进步嘛

　我把蔷薇拿到家里来了，我想找个花瓶来供养她。
I carry these rosebush back to home, i want to find one bottle to keep them.

　　花瓶我没有，我在一只墙角上寻着了一个断了颈子的盛酒的土瓶。

I do not have the bottle,i find one guri whose neck is broken used to store wine.

　　——蔷薇哟，我虽然不能供养你以春酒，但我要供养你以清洁流泉，清洁的素心。

Oh! Rosebush, although i can not keep you with spring wine, i can keep you with fresh spring and clean heart。

你在这破土瓶中虽然不免要凄凄寂寂地飘零，但比遗弃在路旁被人践踏了的好罢

It would be better for you adrift alonely in this broken guri than leave you alone beside the road .

额，我几时以大欺小了啊，汗

都是高手，我从来没有翻译过散文诗词什么的，哎。。。。。。

我来啦

清晨往松林里去散步，我在林荫路畔发现了一束被人遗弃了的蔷薇。
This morning on my way to the pine wood, I find a bunch of abandoned roses by the side of avenue.

蔷薇的花色还是鲜艳的，一朵紫红，一朵嫩红，一杂是病黄的象牙色中带着几分血晕。The color of them are still bright, mauve, light- red, and sickness yellow with sort of blood-red.  

我把蔷薇拾在手里了。
I pick them up and hold in hand,

青翠的叶上已经凝集着细密的露珠，这显然是昨夜被人遗弃了的。
Green leaves are covered with thick and small dewdrops; apparently tell the abandoned story happened last night.

这是可怜的少女受了薄幸的男子的欺绐？还是不幸的青年受了轻狂的妇人的玩弄呢？昨晚上甜蜜的私语，今朝的冷清的露珠……
Is it a poor girl cheated by a heartless dude, or an unlucky lad fooled of by a flighty woman? However the sweat whisper last night already becomes the remote dawn dewdrop this morning.

我把蔷薇拿到家里来了，我想找个花瓶来供养她。

I take the roses home, wondering if I could find a vase to put them in.

花瓶我没有，我在一只墙角上寻着了一个断了颈子的盛酒的土瓶。

Unfortunately I get no vase, but a dusty wine bottle with neck broken in the corner.

——蔷薇哟，我虽然不能供养你以春酒，但我要供养你以清洁流泉，清洁的素心。

Oh roses, though I can not feed you on spring wine, I will offer you clean stream and pure heart.

你在这破土瓶中虽然不免要凄凄寂寂地飘零，但比遗弃在路旁被人践踏了的好罢？
Faded and fallen lonely in the dusty bottle will be inevitable though, shouldn’t it be better than being trampled by the road side?  

最后由 生如夏花_wendy 于 2009-05-27 16:04:18编辑

呵呵，谢谢MM你的支持，加油！！！