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四六级写作模考题目第一场（5.15-5.24）

一、四级写作模考题目：

（一）
Directions: For this part you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay on the topic My Views on Examinations. You should write at least 120 words and base your essay on the outline below:
1）大学都用考试来衡量学生的成绩，
2）考生可能带来的副作用，
3）我对考试的看法。

二、六级写作模考题目：

（一）
Directions: For this part you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay on the topic Juvenile Delinquency. You should write at least 150 words and base your essay on the outline below:
1）青少年犯罪的现状，
2）这个问题的原因，
3）我的建议。

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楼主 Date: 2008-05-14 09:22:30

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大家积极参与啊！

沙发 Date: 2008-05-14 11:00:48

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好滴，呵呵

板凳 Date: 2008-05-14 11:22:14

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to snoobee:
Nowadays, more crimes are done by young people, and the techenics that they  commit the crimes gets variously,. The situation of Juvenile Delinquency gets serious. (Nowadays,the number of the crimes committed by young people seems to be rising  and the Juvenile Delinquency is increasingly arousing people's attention. )
(Why ? )firstly, the approaches of getting information becomes convenient, (making it happen that )young people are smarter to do want they want to do. they are thirst for new techniques, so when they've got a new idea, they will to do it as they want, ignore( ignoring / unaware of ) their fellows' feeling. So conflict erupt(s) easily. secondly,  the legal sense of  these young generation is weak.  they  even don't (know )what is allowed by law, and what is not allowed.another reason is that (the )young always do things on inpluse. after he  commited the crime, they even can't believe it's done by himself.

these days, i've known that several undergraduates have killed by their fellows. it's so sad. they all do these on inpluse. for more youngers get in universty, we can strengthen their legal sense.  the little (less )the Juvenile Delinquency gets,  the safer our society will be.
最后由新东方李艳华于 2008-05-19 11:19:31编辑

4 楼 Date: 2008-05-14 11:52:17

DELLA

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to Della:
Nowtodays,The grads is high or low (the academic grade's high or low)is a standard for good or bad students (judging a student's good or bad )in university .They do their best to achive to (删)higher point beside to take advantage of all way (by all means ,even at a risk of cheating ),for example，they bought the answer of text form another student ,or they only remember the book in heart and want to get the high grade but reject (without the slightest intension )to do the society (social )exercise. For this ,I want to (say )they could(cannot) realize the exam rightly.I think exam is (only a) way to text (test )our theory knowledge，but we could put it into practise,so we would get what we want !
最后由新东方李艳华于 2008-05-20 10:05:57编辑

5 楼 Date: 2008-05-14 12:48:28

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to:笑羌：
Of course we know ,examination  is a popular way to test student (of )what they （have）learnt in just (the past)half or whole year what they get in the world (删),not just in china ,but  all around the world !
examination has a  long history in the world,to be stand a long time ,so it has it's  reason. whatever you thought , till  a new way to text student  foundup, is will still stand up . it's real.(删)
it's the most fast way to konw the student what they get in the study ,where they need (to)take care ,where they  should spend much time to (on) improve. (删)
But each system has it's (  弱点disadvantages  )， just like there did't have a  ten (one hundred)percent  perfect  things in the world, just thought one text,maybe it couldn't (only an eye on one side cannot )see the whole , some student who don't study hard if  they thought any way to get the answer before the examinaion, they will have a good soccer than the  hard study student ,of crouse ,it  don't abey some rule ,which to the whole world ' sprilt .(some students even think they can succeed in an exam through buying the key sheet, which actually has destined their failure at the very begining )
最后由新东方李艳华于 2008-05-20 10:21:10编辑

6 楼 Date: 2008-05-14 14:16:29

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                        My Views on Examinations
   As we known,the examination is used to measure the achievements of college students.This method  never changed (fails).
      It's obvious that examination brings some side effects.Firstly ,the examination can not really evaluate students' abilities.when they get bad scores,maybe they will be in (A low score may result from) a blue mood and not be interested in doing  anything(删). Thus ,they will lose their own talent because there is no chance and circumstance to develop it. Secondly,in order to attain  a good mark,sometimes they violate the principle to cheat in an examination.This behavior(, which ) bring(s) bad influence in the process of growth.Finally,the system also let college students  induce  narrow the knowledge(cause such a fact as some students are learning not for the knowledge but for the examination).They just spend  much time reading and remembering the books,not doing some useful things.
In my opinion,examination is a method  to test students'capicity,but not the only one.We should have more opportunities to make progress and hve more ways to weigh  our ability.
最后由新东方李艳华于 2008-05-20 10:30:28编辑

7 楼 Date: 2008-05-14 14:17:01

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My Views on Examinations
Examinations are increasingly becoming the major purpose for all students in daily study, a majority of parents believe that the score of test is a most important indicator of student's performance in school, they always feel satisfied when their children getting a high point in exam or test, from their viewpoints, good result in exam is equal to good quality in study.

It’s obvious that only focus(ing) on examination will do harm to the way of (删)study, even the health of bodies, the detail of (删)reasons are stated as following. Firstly, the students are likely to make cheats（cheat） in the examinations,in order to reach a high point. Secondly, the students will not pay attention to the out-of-book knowledge. Thirdly, the students are likely to reduce the time of rest to prepare (for)the examinations. Finally, the students will face with a lot of pressures once they fail in the assigned examinations.

Therefore, in my points of view, examination should not be a sole indictor for evaluating student’s performance, on the contrary, it could ( but )be a reference for teachers or parents to better recognise the learning progress among all learners, then the follow-up plan could be setup to enhance the whole teaching program including (, such as)the way of teaching and teaching materials according to the result of examinations. (good)

最后由新东方李艳华于 2008-05-20 10:35:58编辑

8 楼 Date: 2008-05-14 16:13:19

DELLA

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The letter is too samll to read!

9 楼 Date: 2008-05-14 17:44:07

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                           My Views on Examinations
examinations is a usual way to examine what we have learned after finish(ing) our course in the (at )school ,even (and )most of our student(s) have been striving for a good rusult.
however , nowday s many experts from the reserch institude eduction allege that it is disadvince that (not all good for improving )improve the childerns compositive ability. when the student just contentive (emphasize)their attention to(on) the study of the book  , they will can,t (cannot)know more knowledage out of the book .
in my opionion ,everything have both side(s) , at the bright side , the examination can  urge the student to work hard for their study . at the gloom side ,teh examination have up the students to learn more.( has confined the students attention only to the examination without concern to the world outside of the book). so we should balance it
we can make the result make up of the examination and the other ways such as the forum and the thesis

最后由新东方李艳华于 2008-05-20 10:46:08编辑

10 楼 Date: 2008-05-14 19:17:12

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My views on Examinations
students must make (attend )examination in university,because it is the only way to make up the achievement.without examination we can not (,in a sense, )have fair(ness) in education.around the world,every country have examination,of course the quality of education is different.
Indeed,examination will make bad effect,for example,some student examine (studies only )for the examination,not for the knowledge.
my suggestion is (to have )less examination (and) more practice.exam is only a method,not the result.now some student(s) like examination,but poor in practice.we can not like them.

最后由新东方李艳华于 2008-05-20 10:48:50编辑

11 楼 Date: 2008-05-14 20:37:57

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My Views on Examinations

12 楼 Date: 2008-05-14 21:54:02

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　　In most colleges and universities the examination is used as a chief means of deciding whether a student succeeds or fails in mastering a particular subject. Although it does the job quite efficiently, its side effects are also enormous.
　　To begin with, examinations lower the standards of teaching. Since teachers are often judged by examination results, they are reduced to training their students in exam techniques. No subjects can be taught successfully merely through being approached with intent to take exam (if merely in the direction of seeking more student's high score in the exam). In addition, the most undesirable effect is that examinations encourage bad study habits. As the examination score is the only criterion for his academic performance, a student is driven to memorize mechanically rather than to think creatively.
　　In fact, few of us (would like to)admit that examinations can contribute anything really important to the students’ academic development. If that is the case, why cannot we make a change and devise something more efficient and reliable (than )examinations. (good)
最后由新东方李艳华于 2008-05-20 10:54:24编辑

13 楼 Date: 2008-05-14 21:55:42

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顶起！

14 楼 Date: 2008-05-14 21:56:20

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Juvenile Delinquency
Nowadays more crimes are done by teenagers. To our surprise ,their ages tend to be younger ,at the same time ,the technics the young criminals use are more advanced .for the police ,it's a hard situation now.(good)

最后由新东方李艳华于 2008-05-20 11:09:49编辑

15 楼 Date: 2008-05-14 22:51:14

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                                    Juvenile Delinquency
according the investigation , (there  have occured )more and more juvenile delinquency in our society,we can often watch the new(s) of the children criminal behavior.
there are many reason(s) relate(related) to the problem, first and formost ,the enviroment of the family is (an )improtant role to (factor for the )increase the phenomenon,some parent(s) are so strict to (with )their children that they can ,t endure the stress,so as(, so that ) for a long time . their psychology will be twisted,so they will be (making them)easy to fall down to the road of the delinquency.secondly the eduction from the school is also relate(d) to this problem, the struction of our course is unreasonable , many children even don,t know what is (not forbidden by )law until they against the law. last but not least , the culture of our society also rusult(s) the problem , the tv problem is a big  effection to the children,especially the killing and murder( scenes on the screen)

最后由新东方李艳华于 2008-05-20 11:14:37编辑

16 楼 Date: 2008-05-15 00:53:37

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My view on examinations
Nowadays,one of the way(s) to get in the college is to get a higt print in the (entrance)examination,besides,a good student is (often )judged by the print he has gotten.
So ,many students just only study (from )books,not practice,some of them (whom)even give up their habities.in order to get a high print (points),they may get (even )in a wrong way. i think the students living in these ways will have difficult(y) to get in the community.
最后由新东方李艳华于 2008-05-20 11:16:55编辑

17 楼 Date: 2008-05-15 12:43:07

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My Views on Examinations
It's somewhat a general phenomenon that the examination is taken as a only scale to elemilate (evaluate)the students' performence in the(at) school. And I don't agree with this form.
I think there are many aspects to (use to )elemilate a student .And the performance in the examination is only the standard of learning kownledge.ON this idea of elemilation ,many students will neglect the other skill(s) they need in the future(when they step out of the campus one day).
最后由新东方李艳华于 2008-05-20 11:19:08编辑

18 楼 Date: 2008-05-15 18:24:41

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                                       Juvenile Delinquency
   Nowadays,more and more youths commit  crimes,such as killing, stealing, and robbing.As we all know,this is very headachy. For that it is a serious problem in our country.
   There are so many facts (factors)make (making / leading to )these phenomenon happened(happen ).First of all, our china is a country with large population. so that it is hard
to void the crime .Second, It (is )known to all, since the  quick develop(ment) of the economic(economy), the work pressure have made most parents did not have(without ) enough time to take care of their children. so that it is very easy (for the children)to commit a crime to the children(删).  The last but not the least, the unhealthy information in the internet mislead(s) many children. this (, which )is one of the most important reasons.
Then how can we solve this problem effectively? in my opinion, besides
government's beneficial measure, the parents should spend more time to (on )accompany their children and guide (,guiding )them to discern between right and wrong. and what we can do is to give assistance to them.
最后由新东方李艳华于 2008-05-20 11:29:34编辑

19 楼 Date: 2008-05-15 21:15:57

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My views on examinations

In China,college students have to accept the fact that examinations are a (删)common way used to confirm whether students have gained a good mastering of knowledge.To obtain high marks ,of course,is considered to be the most effective standard of testing a student’s talent.

To a large extent,it is beyond doubt that examinations can inspire students to concentrate on their studies,which ,however,brings some side effects simultaneously.Fisrt of all,students focus much more on books instead of the improvement of self-ability.They do everything aiming only at （gaining）high marks because of the common term—Examination can decide what you are.So,undoubtedly,these students can’t develop themselves to the fullest.Secondly,many students may get stuck with some psychic problems because of their relatively low marks.They may go extremes when they are confused and stressed.This to some extent leads to (a)higher rates of suicide ,drug-abuse and crime among college students

In my view ,examinations are necessary owing to China’s large population and economic situation.But it can’t stand for everything because socity needs those who can put what they learn into practice,not those so-called talents that only achive high mraks in the examination.

(good)
最后由新东方李艳华于 2008-05-20 20:31:52编辑

20 楼 Date: 2008-05-15 23:23:50

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21 楼 Date: 2008-05-16 13:20:31

主题：新东方名师帮你改作文 爱词霸四六级写作模拟大赛

主题：新东方名师帮你改作文爱词霸四六级写作模拟大赛